In this hop, participants post 250 words of their work in progress to be critiqued. Then everyone hops around to critique others.
Last week I learnt ALOT, AGAIN! Thanks everyone!
Ok so this 250 words is where Nathan see’s Ruby again (as saw each other at the coffee shop earlier that day-she was buying crossants) This would be my longest conversation piece so far and not sure if done it right…
“We meet again” he chuckled
“So we do- your not stalking me are you” she smiled
“Well if I didn’t work here then I would be”
“Oh, what do you do? She looked suprised
“Im head chef- how rude of me, let me introduce myself im Nathan” he held out his hand
“Hey, im Ruby” she took his hand and shook it “I was meeting a client”
“Your not a mystery guest are you?” he said
“Don’t worry your safe, for now! Im an events planner, new business”
“Sounds nice- did you give your client a crossant?”
“No, I ate them all” she said with what he thought was a hint of teasing
“So is someone having a party here? Will I be cooking?” Nathan asked
“Yes she is and maybe, depends if your cooking is good ” she said with a soft tone
“Well it looks like we will see more of each other then” he grinned
“I guess so” smiling she took out her business card and handed it to him
He looks at the business card- it is white with tiny blue stars spreading from the side and on the top a blue wand with the name of her agency
“The Fairy Godmother” Nathan mused
“Yes? As in Cinderella, making your event like a fairy tale dream” Ruby chirped “what? Why you looking like your going to laugh? It’s a good name!” she said
“Oh im sure it is- I just don’t believe in fairytales” he smiled
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