In this hop, participants post 250 words of their work in progress to be critiqued. Then everyone hops around to critique others.
Last week I learnt ALOT! This is such a learning tool and helpful in so many ways. Thanks everyone!
Ok so this 250 words is a start of a chapter where we meet Penny- another main character and she has turned up in the shop. Again this is a rough first draft and any tips, comments or advise will be brill! (Am working on the tenses btw and soz if they come up again)
Penny walks up to her desk and turns on the computer knowing that she has enough time to make a cup of tea for herself and the others, as they should be in soon and come back for the screen to wake up and start the day. Taking in the eerie quietness of the shop she walks to the back into the kitchen to start the morning routine.
She was not used to quite surroundings- especially when she had a toddler who is beautiful, but a challenge to say the least. Penny always wondered how she even functioned to get to work and look professional, especially when the toddler in question chucks half of the porridge at her this morning and smiles that cheeky grin that can melt the heart of an ice queen. Luckily it went on her suit and not in her short brown hair that she just washed. Penny turned on the radio for company.
She heard the heating click on in unison with the kettle and she sighed with relief and wondered why it’s this cold in august. Finishing off the teas she went back to the computer happy that it’s in use murmuring away. Sitting down and stirring her tea she checks her personal emails. The usual one from the nursery about the parents committee meeting coming up (like she had time to go to that), the bank statement that she never opens then her eyes look at one from Noah nearly spitting out her tea.
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