Five Sentence Fiction – Detour

My first FSF!

Sophie loved being organised, a bit OCD at times but she had a plan- a life plan and she always thought her path was setting stone, like a motorway.  When she met Charlie the plan took a detour, another path was created. She did not mind as much, just a slight adjustment- maybe now off the motorway onto a duel carriageway. The years went by and another change in events happened- a baby! Now her path was all over the place, much like a country road.

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13 Responses to Five Sentence Fiction – Detour

  1. eyedancers says:

    Great post! It is very challenging trying to engage a reader in five sentences, but just from this one paragraph, I can get a good sense of Sophie and her outlook and dreams. Well done!

  2. Andrew says:

    Welcome to FSF! I can almost sense her frustration as her organized life slowly turned to chaos. Great stuff!

  3. Sarah says:

    Oh how real life twists and turns never quite following the plot! Great story Jenny and so true!

  4. Mark K says:

    YAY! A fellow newbie to the FSF stage! And what an entrance – well done 🙂

  5. JazzBumpa says:

    Cute and sweet. Whenever anyone I know has a baby, I tell them – now your life is forever changed! Five short, well-constructed sentences. Nicely done. JzB

  6. Well done … you conveyed your story in your small little five sentences.
    A great feat you accomplished.

  7. thankyou all so much 🙂 it means alot xxx

  8. Sandra says:

    I liked the idea of marriage as a ‘duel’ carriageway. Was that purposeful?

  9. Sarah Mac says:

    A very clever way to describe how life twists and turns taking us from the path we thought we would follow.

  10. Yes. Life happens when we’re making other plans indeed! Good job, Jenny.

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