Two lines

Im linking up with JB47′s 100 Word Challenge.Week 51- 100 word count challenge

Prompt- The line was drawn

Three, two, one… she held her breath as she glanced at her future. A moment of shock, was this really happening? Surely not! But the line was drawn, two in fact.

Did I read the instructions right she wondered??

“Well of course I did” she said out loud shaking her head

“Who can pee on a stick wrong?”

Laura held it up to the light- yes its defiantly prominent whatever way she held it. Laura sat there and stared at the stick like it might change.

“Oh god im really pregnant” She nervously muttered under the breath that has now come back to her


Found this prompt tricky at first but then inspiration came to me and remembered the initial shock of a pregnancy test!

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30 Responses to Two lines

  1. Good take on the prompt- there will be many who can associate with this!

  2. i love this, i can remember that time (in the loos at asda!).

  3. Sally says:

    Great piece, I only hope that she will be pleased once the initial shock has worn off. i love the last line, ‘muttered under the breath that has now come back.’ It says so much.

  4. You’ve really captured the moment here, great write! I’m still waiting for inspiration on this one…

  5. Uwlalum says:

    Nice! It is amazing how powerful that single line can be and how it can change your life.

  6. Great take on the prompt. I hope she wanted this pregnancy. Very well done!

  7. jfb57 says:

    Oh how brilliant! I did not expect THAT sort of a line. I suspect that this could be the start of a serial too. Thank you for takingart this week.

  8. Mayumi-H says:

    😀 Very nice, different take on the prompt! Does this one ring close to home for you? (I remember that feeling…your narrator’s “oh, God,” is so true!)

    I like this one sentence a lot: But the line was drawn, two in fact. That’s a great use of the words!

  9. lorrainefort says:

    this is a great line…and one many have faced and crossed as you wrote it. well done! Even those wanting to be pregnant find that moment of “Oh My Goodness!” a changer of life…the inception of motherhood even before it’s real in your mind. Great job!

  10. Delft says:

    Very clever line to take. And what a life changing line it is.

  11. I like this take on the prompt. That particular line is a terrifying and exciting life-changer, that’s for sure.

  12. Sandra says:

    Good take on the prompt. An exciting moment, convincingly portrayed.

  13. Gilly Gee says:

    At first red I assumed she was thrilled but actually you have left it entirely open, very clever.

  14. And suddenly a life is changed forever.
    A very real and sudden take on the prompt. Excellent work!

  15. Lynne Ayers says:

    So many lines in the sane so many we cross … and this is a BIG one. Nice take.

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